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Fly by ~naruto-art-freak:iconnaruto-art-freak:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open



Free as a bird
Up in the sky
Here we go
Watch me fly

Through the clouds
Beside the moon
Thoughts dissapear
Much too soon

What was lost
Is within my reach
Death overcome
Though I beseech

Impossible goals
Come with a price
They're deadly as
Rolling the dice

But take a chance
Design your fate
You can do it
It's not too late

Free as a bird
Up in the sky
Here we go
We can fly
©2007-2009 ~naruto-art-freak
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Author's Comments

XD this one isnt so dark and it doesnt give me the creeps ;p and believe it or not... i actually like it ^^

I let my mom read it and all of my other poems (Well she kinda snatched em from me and ignored my screaming, yellin and pleading lol) and she read them while i sat in the seat across from her sulking >< lolz yup

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~xboxdemon13 Oct 16, 2007, 1:01:23 PM
O.O :rofl: thats funny! and ur poem is awesome too!

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~naruto-art-freak Oct 16, 2007, 1:19:25 PM
Hey!!! :cries: it was SOOOOOOO nt funny.... well maybe. XD i snatched the stories from her hands just in time though ;p

Thanks!! and for deh comment too ;p

oh yeah, i forgot to comment on it earlier but the thing you posted on Youtube was cool XD

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...some of us spiral so deep we can't get ourselves out of the grave we dug. We need someone to lend us a hand.. something to live for.
:blackrose: ~Ross - Windows to the Heart. :blackrose:
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~xboxdemon13 Oct 16, 2007, 2:29:13 PM
XD yah it wus.:giggle:no prb Yah it was kewl. mah frend edited it though so i cant take teh creditz for all uv it.

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~RainingAshes Oct 16, 2007, 4:52:51 PM
Nice poem, I like how you sort of repeated the first stanza.
But I believe you spelt 'disappear' wrong
Other than that, great poem

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"It's a bit frightening really...how we kill for power and still feel unsatisfied..."
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~frozen-angel Oct 16, 2007, 7:54:42 PM
Very nicely written.

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~ArinaAngel Oct 17, 2007, 11:19:25 AM
That was lovely ^^

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"There's nothing like you and I, so why do I even try?"
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~CursedSoul0001 Oct 18, 2007, 9:44:14 PM
Beautifully written, great job!

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I love this world even more because you're here.
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~o0o0o0o0o Dec 15, 2007, 7:26:22 PM
I like this. I like the "Design your fate" line.

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funny poems
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~naruto-art-freak Jan 5, 2008, 8:56:13 PM
Thanks ^.^ It's one of my favs.

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...some of us spiral so deep we can't get ourselves out of the grave we dug. We need someone to lend us a hand.. something to live for.
:blackrose: ~Ross - Windows to the Heart. :blackrose:
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